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GoktimusPrime
18th November 2011, 08:41 PM
For Sky Byte

Post yer Transformers haikus and senryus here!

Okay, so the "rule" is pretty simple.
1. It has to follow the 5-7-5 syllable structure (or as close as you can get within reason ;))
2. It has to be about Transformers. :)

GO!

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遠い星 ::::::::::::: tooi hoshi :::::::::: from a distant star
トランスフォーマー ::: toransufoomaa ::::: the Transformers
やって来た ::::::::: yatte kita ::::::::::: came here

可動箇所 ::::: kadou kasho ::::: articulation
大切なこと :::: taisetsuna koto :: is an important thing
遊びは文化 ::: asobi wa bunka :: playing is culture

Optimus Primal
Throws his own faeces at you!
Munky over trukk

Tetsuwan Convoy
18th November 2011, 08:55 PM
Little Yellow car
Mildly popular guy
Now big ugly mute


I love Haikus. Taught my year 5/6 Haikus on taching prac, everyone loved it!!

GoktimusPrime
19th November 2011, 12:10 AM
Where are the new toys?
Soundwave, Mirage and Wheeljack
Bring back Classicsverse

Firestorm
19th November 2011, 12:53 AM
Bruised and Beaten
The big green and yellow bug
Poor Waspinator

(my first ever attempt at a haiku, probably not right)

Tetsuwan Convoy
19th November 2011, 03:31 PM
Bruised and Beaten
The big green and yellow bug
Poor Waspinator

(my first ever attempt at a haiku, probably not right)

just needs one more syllable on the first line, but considering how gok added in "as close as you can get..." I am sure it's fine ;)

Here's another one.

Prime and Megatron
Different Paths towards peace.
Eternal Struggle

GoktimusPrime
19th November 2011, 06:25 PM
Tyrannosaurus
The purple faced dictator
All Hail Megatron!



"Tyrannosaurus" is a reference to nature, so that makes this a proper Haiku! :D Withuot a nature reference a 5-7-5 syllable poem is just a Senryu... this was also a running joke with Gelshark in Car Robot -- he claimed to be proficient in reciting Haiku, but he was often just reciting Senryu -- and Fire Convoy pointed this out to him the first time he did this (he said something like, "That's not a haiku, that's a senryu... and not a very good one at that"), which of course made Gelshark mad. :p ;) Not sure if this ever got translated over in the RiD dubbing... ??

Most of my other haikus have nature references too (e.g. "distant star," "faeces" :p) the only one that I've written so far that's really a senryu is the one about articulation. :) No need for anyone to get fussed over it... if anything, getting haikus and senryus confused just fits in with the spirit of this thread being devoted to Sky-Byte/Gelshark anyway!! :D :cool: As long as everyone's making an attempt to keep it within 5-7-5 (or therebouts) and relating it to Transformers, then it's all good. (^_^)

GoktimusPrime
20th November 2011, 11:35 PM
Explosions, cars, babes
A story needs nothing else
Bay made lots of dough

GoktimusPrime
25th November 2011, 10:33 AM
I love Classicsverse
Contemporary G1
I wish they'd make more

GoktimusPrime
27th November 2011, 08:46 AM
O, Transformers Prime
Wheeljack is Action-Master?
Stupid cliffhanger! :p

GoktimusPrime
13th August 2013, 12:51 PM
Admiral of Fangs
Does it sound so strange to you?
Function of Gelshark

Sinnertwin
13th August 2013, 01:19 PM
Preordered Sandstorm
In their Pile my toys will wait
Shelves mourn quietly