Quote Originally Posted by STL View Post
The jumping of thoughts don't progress very smoothly either. He suddenly thinks of Monstructor. Then thinks "Fortunately" as in he's glad to be away from battle. Yet here he is prortecting and knows he'll have to move onto the next battle.
I liked your comments so much I read them and the story again! heh heh

The monstructor and "fortunately" thing definitely jump, and it was my head battling with tieing it to idw's continuity (which, like Feeling Yellow, I love doing) but not trying to give too much away. Probably a little bit between these two thoughts would have helped.